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More and more people are moving away from an agricultural background to relocate to cities in order to look for work. What will be the consequences of this? What solutions can you offer?

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In
this
 modern world, due to the development of technology and the progress of education a large number of
job
 openings are seen in the urban cities.The majority of the people have started migrating to urban
cities leaving
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cities, leaving
 behind their agricultural background for a better paying
job
.
This
 essay will discuss effect that
this
 will have on our world and provides solutions for overcoming
this
 situation. Education is one of the important aspect of one's life and almost everybody opts for the same to gain knowledge and to get a well paid
job
. Since
job
 opportunity is very less in the rural areas as compared to the urban cities, many individuals move from their homeland to big cities.
Although
this
 is a good thing for the individual, it will affect the farming business to a great extent. If all the farmers
starts
Suggestion
start
 moving and working
on
Suggestion
in
 other fields the cultivation of foods will be very less and will affect the
costing
object formed by a mold
casting
 range of food items. There will be very less farmers left for agriculture and
this
 will increase their burden. There will be a shortage of grains, fruits and vegetable which will in turn affect health of the people. The main solution for
this
 problem is to develop machines that can help in farming.
This
 way the farmers will have to do very less manual work on the same hand more foods will be cultivated with the help of machines.
For instance
, ploughing machines,
sowing
joining or attaching by stitches
sewing
 machines. Another thing that the government can do is to provide
job
 facilities in the farmers hometown itself so that they don't have to move. In conclusion, for the betterment of the farmer and the
nation
Suggestion
national
 government must invent machines and
also
 provide assured
job
 for their well being.
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