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Wearing uniforms is popular in schools, but some people argue that it might cause damage to children's individuality.What is your opinion?

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Now a days many schools are mandatory to wear costume instated of casual wear due to maintain the unity in the class, but
on the other hand
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 many citizens are suggested it's a damage of the individuality. In
this
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 essay I will argue why uniforms are required in schools.
Firstly
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, in many educational institutions
is recommend
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is recommended
is recommending
has recommended
recommends
 to wear uniforms in schools due to in the class no rich or poor student difference because if there is no uniform every one will come individual
dress
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code
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code, then
then
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 automatically the difference will come
in
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into
 the class and it's impacting on studies and behaviour
hence
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 many popular
institutionsare
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institutions are
 recommending the same
dress
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code
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.
Secondly
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, if everyone is coming to same apparel it's automatically popular
into
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in
 the market and the
school
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 reputation will
increase
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increase, therefore
therefore
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 many new students
interestedto
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interested to
 join the
school
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 based on the unity
.
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.
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, In India all top universities like IIT and IIM are following wardrobe due country wide it's easily recognized the students
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 it's impacted other schools and followed same thing.
On the other hand
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, mainly, if schools are not
maintaing
a formally arranged gathering
meeting
maintain
 the
dress
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code it's
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code, it's
 damaging on the behaviour due to
every one
all people
everyone
 thinking their
indivisuality
the quality of being individual
individuality
hence
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 it's
effected
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effect
effects
 on
school
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 reputation and sometimes impacted on studies.
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moreover no
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Moreover, no
Moreover no
 one knows who are students and they don't get
recongine
the state or quality of being recognized or acknowledged
recognition
 from others. In conclusion, wearing uniform is combining the different mind set people in schools and it's
easyly
with ease ('easy' is sometimes used informally for 'easily')
easily
 popular in the market if they conducted any meeting in
locality
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locality, therefore
therefore
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school
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 will get
recoginize
generally approved or compelling recognition
recognized
recognised
permently
for a long time without essential change
permanently
 rather than to maintain
induvisall
a human being
individual
dress
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code
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 and they have many problems for
this
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. I have argued why educational
instuatues
set up or lay the groundwork for
institutes
 should maintain the uniform for the students.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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