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some people think that people who choose job early and keep doing it are more like to get a satisfying career than those who frequently change their jobs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #job #career #change #jobs
Choice
of
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for
 the
job
is depend
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depends
 on the mind of the people. Someone begin their career in the
job
 from
early age
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an early age
 and
continuously
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continue
continued
continuing
 doing one
job
 for a long time
instead
 of
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 who usually
change
 their jobs. I disagree that
frequently
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frequent
frequency
 changes are necessary for the bright career because sometime small changes give new experience and happiness in life. Sometimes, people start their
job
 in early age and they do their
job
 with minimum liabilities and facilities. Once they understand all the work what they do for the
company
 or organization after they jump to
change
 the
job
 position or companies. They try to go abroad. So they can get new environment, more money with good facilities which provide by the new boss.
Moreover
, individuals can get new experience which
help
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helps
 to
then
 for future work.
However
, sometime small
change
 in one
company
 to another, it proves
disaster
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disastrous
 for us. If people
change
 the
company
 without any
preparation it
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preparation, it
 very dangerous for them.
First they
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First, they
 need to do research about the
company
 when they want to try for application.
Second
 the environment of the staff, accomodation and location which
also
 very important things. Sometime they
can not
can not
cannot
 cope up with the fast moving life and with the new faces in
company
Suggestion
the company
. To conclude, we need to welcome
changes
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change
 with open
arms but
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arms, but
, we need to prepare for
innerself
Suggestion
the inner self
inner self
. Sometimes, it
give
Suggestion
gives
 bad experience if we
change
 the
job
 without preparation.

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