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It is better to save money than to spend it. How far do you agree with this statement? Is saving money more important than spending in today’s world? Give reasons for your answer, and provide ideas and examples from your own experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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The choice of how
money
 should be spent is debatable. Some individuals are of the opinion that it is not best to save cash. I strongly disagree with the fact, as I believe that keeping some funds aside will help prepare for
unforseen
not anticipated
unforeseen
 issues and
such
money
 could
also
 be used for investment purposes. Perhaps, the most important reason why it is crucial to keep some funds in
bank
Suggestion
the bank
banks
a bank
, is because life is unpredictable, as one could go bankrupt anytime. It could be argued that with efficient planning, bankruptcy could be prevented,
however
 external events
such
 as unplanned redundancy in
workplace
Suggestion
the workplace
, could make a person go broke and
hence
 the need to rely on
money
 that has been saved.
For
instance during
Accept comma addition
instance, during
 the 2018 global economic crisis, it was reported by the Nigerian Guardian that most mid income earners survived on voluntary contributions that have been made over the years.
Therefore
, it is clear that some
fall-back
a device (as a decorative loop of cord or fabric) for holding or drawing something back
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 finances are important if one is to live through hard times. Beside the need to save for the future, a person's savings can
also
 be used for investments that will yield more income. Today there are loads of investment banks and fund managers that advise on how residual funds can be used to create more wealth. Spending all of one's
money
 have the tendency to lead to penury as the human need is insatiable, but if
this
money
 is properly invested, the individual is assured of a more secured future. In conclusion, humans have the tendency to always want immediate gratification, it is wise to put some
money
 aside will help take care of futuristic
isuues
prepare and issue for public distribution or sale
issues
 and
such
 funds could
also
 be used to yield more
money
.

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