Some young people are leaving the countryside to live in cities and towns, leaving only old people in the country side What problems are caused by this issue? What can be done to solve the situation ?

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These days youth is being attracted by the metro cities. Due to the rise in job opportunities and easy accessibility to all day to day needs, like education, and public transport and more all are available at the doorstep.
This
migration
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migrating
is leading to several problems as most of the elderly people are living in rural areas. In
this
essay, I would discuss what are the challenges we are facing and what should be our point of action
Firstly
, as the population in urban areas grows to continue at an alarming rate, the consequences can be seen in every
sector whether
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sector, whether
it is healthcare, traffic or even clean air or water. In developing countries, it is more alarming. There was news published in 'The Hindu' leading newspaper of India which showed that 65% of people living in un-organized colonies don't have access to clean water. There is a waiting list of approximately one month, in the public sector hospitals. The average time of
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
inside
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in
a city has been increased up to 30 minutes and in peak hours approximately 90 min.
This
trend is more alarming as every
year more
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year, more
people are making inroads to metros. As the trend continues, we can tackle it with some immediate and structural steps. We need to generate jobs in the countryside. Most of the people that migrate are due to bread and butter,
therefore
if we can arrange some kind of decent jobs in the countryside it will solve the major part of our problem. We should encourage more work from home culture and set up universities and startups in the countryside. Public transport should be encouraged in all offices. People who are responsible for pollution should be severely penalized. Exercise and yoga should be made compulsory so that it could reduce pressure on
healthcare
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health care
. Blue-collar jobs and fancy life of
metros
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the metros
are indeed attracting our youth, but if we take the right steps and involve the general
public we could
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public, we could
tackle these problems very effectively.
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