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Both the poor and the rich find the accessibility into university difficult. Do you agree or disagree?

#accessibility #university
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It is believed that whether it be poverty-stricken or affluent they face difficulty getting into
university
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. I completely agree with the notion. I believe that universities have set academic preferences and the limited number of seats which abandon the dreams of children from both the poorest homes and their wealthier peers.
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 of all, universities have certain academic criteria which are
must
used to form the superlative
most
 to be fulfilled.
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, it becomes difficult for underprivileged because schools are incapable
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, minimum percentages required in certain universities
is
Suggestion
are
 above 75%, which is not accomplished by even the children from the sound background.
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, it shatters the dream of many children. Another point to consider is that restricted seats allow only a few students to
enroll
register formally as a participant or member
enrol
 in universities. The finite number of seats again breaks the heart of students.
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, students have to appear for the entrance exams which are shortlisted as per the available number of seats.
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eventually let
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eventually lets
 only the cream to enter the
university
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 class. In conclusion, entrance in
university
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 is not dependent on the social group.
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, both the haves and have
nots
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not
have
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had
 to face the same process which is based on the academic results and existing seats in the
university
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.
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