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In many countries smoking in now illegal in public places. Do you agree or disagree?

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The number of people around the world puffing cigarettes is rising over the years. But there were newly implemented regulations that smoking in public areas is illegal. I firmly agree with the decision to set limits to places where it is only allowed to smoke.
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 of all, people are well aware and knowledgeable what smoking does to the body, let alone the lungs. Even the companies manufacturing
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 product have warning written on the packages about its horrendous effects. Cases of individual suffering from cancer and increasing mortality rate are the consequences of smoking-related disease, to name a few.
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, a person smokes 1 pack or 20 sticks of cigarette are more likely to acquire lung cancer.
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, it only implicates unhealthy outcome in our system.
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, we have the so-called a
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-hand smoker. Those who inhales the emitted vapour from the main smoker. Non-smoking individual can
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 develop the sickness due to the substances it consists. Unfortunately,
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 is happening in a vast crowd on a daily basis.
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, the count of people smoking on a train or in the bus station and standing
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 to them who are non-smoking individuals are perfect prey to absorb a considered harmful type of toxin. Again, the results that it creates in the human body with no doubt is terrifying. In my conclusion, I definitely believe that implementation of rules to limit certain sectors for smoking is beneficial to the majority because it can aid to promote a healthy living.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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