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Some people believe the aim of university education is to help graduates get better job . Others believe there are much wider benefits of University education for both individuals and society . Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Nowadays people believe that the main reason for them to go to
university
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 is just to graduate and get a job
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 Where as others think it's more than education
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This
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 essay will discuss both views and my opinion.
Firstly
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, it is true that the main reason of going to
university
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 is to receive
education
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an education
 and after that get a job
for
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in
 the
future
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However
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,
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 studying in
university
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 is a huge
benefits
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benefit
 for ourselves as well as to build and improve our country
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 Each generation does a
favor
promote over another
favour
 to their own country by studying greatly and use that in the
future
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,
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 like business studies helps the economy and majoring in science subjects helps the
society
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 too. There are a plenty of things that people can achieve from graduation. Whether for themselves of for the
society
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 going to
university
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 helps people become more sociable and open minded
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Independency
a city in western Missouri; the beginning of the Santa Fe Trail
Independence
 makes people confident. In my opinion
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 I believe the main reason for going to
university
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 is to get
education
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an education
 and get a good job
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 because that's how
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 will be able to help the
society
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 and achieve
my
objective form of "I"
me
 everything I want in the
future
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. Same goes to the other people if they continue going to
university
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 it will lead to a great
future
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 for them and the
society
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