It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction

It is sometimes argued that discipline should be applied to teach children about what is
right
and wrong. While I agree that learning
this
distinction is vital for them, I believe that only some types of discipline may be used to discourage kids from misbehaving. On the one hand, there are two reasons why teaching kids to be fully aware of things they should and should not do is becoming essential. Those who have learnt to behave well and do the
right
things are likely to be productive members of society in the future.
This
is because they are often easy to understand their rights and obligations and, more importantly, strictly follow rules.
By contrast
, children may mislead or even commit a crime when growing up, if they are confused about the disparity between
right
and wrong. Once they have lost their
ways
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way
, it takes lots of time and effort to turn their lives around.
On the other hand
, I believe that only a few kinds of discipline at low level are applicable to educate good
behaviors
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviours
behaviour
for
child
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children
the child
a child
.
Firstly
, if kids are being naughty in the
first
time, parents or teacher will remind and explain about what they have mistaken.
Secondly
, in case children keep behaving improperly, parents could let them stand in a corner for a while to carefully think about things they have done.
Finally
, kids would
receiving
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receive
rewards for well-behaving, and they would definitely lose their privileges once things are getting wrong. Having applied by my parents,
for example
, I have tried my best to act in
proper manner
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a proper manner
the proper manner
for being given candy;
otherwise
my parents would not allow me to watch TV. In conclusion,
although
learning to differentiate between
right
and wrong things is necessary for children, I believe that parents and teachers should only apply several types of low-level punishment.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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