In some countries, it is illegal for companies to reject job applicant for their age. Is this a positive or negative development.
Every person has the right to work and the potential towards it cannot be decided based on their ages.
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the job
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of elderly people would certainly create strain on Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
government
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the government
but
there will be significant Correct word choice
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gain
in vacancies for Fix the agreement mistake
gains
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countries
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the country's
development
.
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development
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the development
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companies
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companies
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and
will Correct word choice
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development
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the development
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nation
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the nation
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For instance
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now-a-days
in India most Correct the word
nowadays
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apply
companies
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instead
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people
due to
which many Linking Words
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the creation
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in
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helps
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Thus
, it will ultimately help the Linking Words
nation
to grow.
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Secondly
, if the elderly were discriminated against on the basis of age, Linking Words
then
it would cause a strain on public resources because the ageing population is largely a dependent population. Linking Words
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, if Linking Words
this
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a job
then
it creates Linking Words
a
pressure on Correct article usage
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to
them. Change preposition
for
For example
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from
elderly people. So, if they were discriminated Change preposition
by
then
government functioning Linking Words
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be affected and ultimately affect the country.
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companies
giving equal rights to every individual will be on Use synonyms
positive
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the positive
countries
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countries'
country's
development
because it is fair, it increases the skills and ability to solve problems Use synonyms
also
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improving
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improves
economy
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the economy
nation
.Use synonyms
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