In some countries, it is illegal for companies to reject job applicant for their age. Is this a positive or negative development.

Every person has the right to work and the potential towards it cannot be decided based on their ages.
Although
, rejecting
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of elderly people would certainly create strain on
government
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,
but
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there will be significant
gain
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in vacancies for
youngster
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that will help in
countries
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development
.
Youngster
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play a vital role towards
development
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the development
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of
nation
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. The greatest benefit for them is that
while
applying
in
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companies
they won't be judged based on their age rather they will gain significant experience in
companies
and
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will
leads
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to
development
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of
nation
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.
For instance
,
now-a-days
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in India most
of
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companies
prefer to hire fresher
instead
of experienced
person
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people
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,
due to
which many
companies
started to invest in
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and
creation
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the creation
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of new projects
such
as artificial intelligence, bullet
project
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and
in
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scientific research,
helps
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them to improve skills and ability to solve problems.
Thus
, it will ultimately help the
nation
to grow.
Secondly
, if the elderly were discriminated against on the basis of age,
then
it would cause a strain on public resources because the ageing population is largely a dependent population.
Therefore
, if
this
population is without
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just because they are older,
then
it creates
a
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pressure on
youngster
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to provide everything
to
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them.
For example
, one research suggested that 80% of taxes in Canada are paid
from
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elderly people. So, if they were discriminated
then
government functioning
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be affected and ultimately affect the country. In conclusion,
companies
giving equal rights to every individual will be on
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side for
countries
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development
because it is fair, it increases the skills and ability to solve problems
also
improving
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economy
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the economy
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of the
nation
.

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