some people think reading stories in books is better than watching tv or playing computer games for children. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

Children nowadays have
diversity
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diverse
ways to enjoy their
times
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time
. Some people argue that
younger
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the younger
should spend
times
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time
on books rather than digital products like television and video games. I agree with them in all aspects. Children can build up reading skill
though
by means of; with aid of; through the act or agency of; "destroyed by fire"
through
books. Reading ability is essential for study and can only
being
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be
obtained though frequent reading.
Furthermore
, it is nearly impossible to develop
this
skill by watching TV or playing virtual games.
Therefore
, children who spent few times on books will more likely to struggle
in
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with
reading. Which
set
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sets
a burden on obtaining knowledge from
written
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writing
materials. In future education, the disabilities in reading could affect the study of all subjects. Books can shape the way children behave. Children can develop their own values
though
by means of; with aid of; through the act or agency of; "destroyed by fire"
through
the stories.
For example
, they could learn to be honest though the story of Washington cut down the cherry tree. Since stories will show the outcomes of different choices, it helps children to gain awareness of good
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
and the result of miss
behave
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behaves
. It is easy to understand why behave oneself is important in stories since
stories
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the stories
are easy to understand. Digital videos could disturb children's concentration. Children who spend plenty times in front of
screen
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the screen
a screen
find hard to concentrate on study, they get distracted easily. In the contract, reading help children to focus on the thing they are doing. With well attention, can children do their
works
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work
better and quicker, even can
them
people in general
they
feel achievement. Books have positive impacts on children and build up fundamental abilities for
future
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the future
while television impose a hindered in children’s development.

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