Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

It is thought by some that a good way of bringing people whose cultures and ages are different is the
music
. In my opinion, I believe that
music
can bring people with their different cultures together, whereas I think
music
is unable to render people from different generations closer. On the one hand, one reason why I believe
music
is likely to bring people coming from different cultures together is that
music
can break down cultural barriers. Normally, performing a
song
not only needs a singer, but
also
requires people to have the ability to play some musical instruments in order to make the
song
great.
This
indicates that performing a
song
ordinarily has nothing to do with what cultures, people originate from because it depends on people’s musical skills.
As a result
, people who want to play a
song
with others do not need to consider how to reconcile themselves to people coming from other cultures and feel free to interact with others.
For example
, in 2012 in Hanoi, there was a group of people having various nationalities.
Although
they speak different languages, they still cooperate with others in playing a Beethoven's 5th symphony in a street, which brings residents in Hanoi a beautiful
music
show.
Nevertheless
, there is one reason why I think that
music
does not make older and younger people closer.
Firstly
, each generation has their own
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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