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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Choosing a
university
 degree is a difficult choice for students as it will lead them to a career in their future. Some people believe to study any course of their choice while others argue to only take relevant subjects like science and technology that would benefit their future.
This
 essay will discuss the importance of picking an individual's own degree and studying useful subjects allowed at the
university
. There are several options an aspiring
university
 student can decide on from arts to science and technology.
However
, it is critical to analyse which course would provide him or her a satisfying and comfortable work in his or her life. He or she may choose a career path in music but with today's competition and music industry, unless he or she makes a breakthrough, it would be difficult to get financial stability. But
this
 field could be enough and satisfying for some people despite financial difficulties.
On the other hand
, one can
also
 choose to study in the
university
 to improve
thier
of them or themselves
their
there
 hobbies that can make them happy.
On the contrary
, universities can only offer courses that are important for the future or on high demand on
th
definite article
the
 job market.
This
 will give students limited opportunities to get what they really want but will secure them a high paying job later in life.
For example
, accountants can get paid
upto
Suggestion
up to
 $200,000 a year and IT personnel can receive
upto
Suggestion
up to
 $80,000 per annum for an entry level in Australia.
Inspite
Suggestion
In spite
 of having financial freedom,
this
 person may hate the job because
that is
 not really what he wanted and may quit his work. In my opinion, people should be able to choose any career path they want because they will spend most of their life working in there. It is important to choose something that you love doing than to quit and start over to something else.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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