Television dominates the free-time of too many people. It can make people lazy and prevent them from socialising with others. Do you agree or disagree?

Television
plays a major role in
majority
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the majority
of the peoples'
life
, people enjoy watching movies, listening music, watching sports
etc
in their leisure
time
.
However
, watching
television
can take up a lot of
time
which could be utilized for socializing with people and friends. In my opinion, if we limit the amount of
time
we watch
television
, we can enjoy our free
time
.
First
of all, there
is not doubt
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doesn't doubt
does not doubt
about the fact that
television
has brought a significant change and has opened the windows of
new era
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a new era
in our
life
.
For instance
, there are several channels being played; including but not limited to, BBC news, Movies, Cartoons, national geography, social
dramas etc
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dramas, etc.
dramas etc.
, one can enjoy watching any of the
channel
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channels
based on his preference. Considering myself, I prefer watching movies and learning new things from
national geography channel
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the national geographic channel
national geographic channel
, in my case
TV
not only enhances my general information about
wild
all living things (except people) that are undomesticated
wildlife
life
and nature, but
also
provided me
opportunity
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the opportunity
an opportunity
to watch latest science fiction movies and enjoy leisure
time
when I am alone.
However
, I feel if I spend extended hours sitting in front of
TV
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the TV
and doing nothing it may reflect
adverse effect
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an adverse effect
on my health.
Moreover
, watching
TV
is a passive activity. There are several negative
attibutes
attribute or credit to
attributes
associated
to
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with
this
particular activity and it would be worth to mention here. Doctors and most parents would agree that watching
TV
has produced everlasting and unaltered
affects
property of a personal character that is portable but not used in business
effects
on the
life
of people especially children as it diminished the
eye sight
normal use of the faculty of vision
eyesight
slowly and gradually one may start having blurred images as he may not see thing clearly.
Furthermore
, those who spend most of the
time
on
TV
, would not have
time
to meet
and socialize people
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people and socialize
, and involve in
healthy
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health
and sports activity. I would like to mention here that one of my
friend
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friends
used to watch
television
channels extensively, he preferred sitting home alone, meeting none. As there is a saying, "Excess of
Every thing
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Everything
is dangerous", I personally strongly believe and agree with
this
saying and would like to highlight over here that
TV
is just a device
that is
there to help us to get self entertained, know the information on what's happening around the world etc. Spending excessive
time
could bring catastrophic results in our social as well as professional
life
,
therefore
, we should spend only a reasonable required
time
watching it on controlled scheduled
way and rest
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the way and rest
of the
time
should be utilized in other fruitful activities like sports, making relations strong and living
healthy
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a healthy life
healthy lives
life
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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