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Many people believe that counties should produce food for all population eats and import food as little as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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A lot of people are of the opinion that individual countries ought to limit the import of
food
 to a minimum and grow their own
food
 to feed its populace. Personally, I agree with
this
 assertion completely as it helps improve the economy and make the inhabitants healthier.
Firstly
, agriculture is fundamental to the growth of any nation's economy. When a country grows its own
food
,
this
sector which
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sector, which
 is a large employer of
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
 grows too,
consequently
 providing jobs for its citizens and reducing the amount of importation. The effect of
this
 on the economy is seen in the example of the United States of
America which
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America, which
 grows over 90% of its own
food
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food, thus
thus
 making the dollar stronger as little funds are expended importing
food
.
Secondly
, locally growing
food
 makes it available and affordable leading to a healthier society. When
food
 is produced locally, it reduces the cost of transportation and
storage making
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storage, making
 it cheaper for the people to afford which would ultimately lead to the reduction of hunger, malnutrition and other
food
 related illnesses.
For example
, rural communities which
has
Suggestion
have
 lots of farmers rarely lack
food
 nor suffer from
hunger
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hunger, although
although
 they may lack other social amenities.
This
 shows that when people are closer to the source of
food
, they become healthier. In conclusion,
food
 is a necessity and a nation would benefit more if it focuses on producing its own
food
 and cutting down on imports.
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