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Creative artists should always be given the freedom to express their own ideas (in words, pictures, music or film) in whichever way they wish. There should be no government restrictions on what they do. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

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To commence with,
art
 is an unbound
form
 of unique ideas and creative thinking beyond the imagination of common people. Any kind of restrictions can refrain an artist from delivering an excellent piece of work, resulting in an incomplete
form
 of
art
 or even the output can be a complete disaster.
For example
,
last
 year in India, a
movie
 was released named ‘Padmavat’, which was from a section of people regarded as a false interpretation of the past.
As a result
, the parts of the
movie
 were cut and re-shot to satisfy a few, but the
movie
 after release turned into a big flop. Evidently, a confined
form
 of
art
 cannot do justice to an artist’s work in its true sense.
In addition
, an uncontrolled
form
 of 
art
 can be used as a powerful tool to highlight several social issues of society.
In other words
, there are many problems persisting in the world that people do not find comfortable talking about because of either religion or their orthodox thinking.
Therefore
, paintings, music and movies indeed, a
relatable
art
form
 to mankind, can assist a country to fight against these concerns effectively.
For instance
, a
movie
 titled ‘Padman’ enlightened the importance of sanitary pads for girls and women, resulting in its acceptance globally in all the rural areas of India.
Hence
, artists should be allowed to express their thoughts with no regulations.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Freedom of expression
  • Censorship
  • Artistic integrity
  • Cultural identity
  • Social responsibility
  • Public order
  • Discrimination
  • Hate speech
  • Self-regulation
  • Government intervention
  • Vulnerable groups
  • Creativity
  • Democracy
  • Fundamental right
  • Moral obligation
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