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Some believe that people who do physical work should be paid on par with the people who have high level degree. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that the manual workforce should be assessed as same as the highly educated employees. From my own perspective, educated professionals deserve to be paid
higher
Suggestion
a higher salary
higher salaries
salary
 than the less educated people who always do hard
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
 due to specialized job requirements and the value of knowledge.
First
 of all, people who do the manual
work
 contribute to the development of a country. These days, in the construction industry, workers receive more
salary
 than the previous times.
For example
, in my country, doctors cannot get more
salary
 than some construction
workers even
Accept comma addition
workers, even
 though the doctors who are highly educated because of our economic situation and a
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
 market environment. In
this
 case, the blue
color
a band that fits around the neck and is usually folded over
collar
 workers might receive more
salary
 than the white
color
a band that fits around the neck and is usually folded over
collar
 workers.
However
, white
color
a band that fits around the neck and is usually folded over
collar
 workers who have well educated should be receive more income because of their
work
 requirements which need particular skills and knowledge which is accumulated by hardworking during the period from primary school to the university. Most highly educated people are paid more
salary
 than less educated people who do physical
work
.
For example
, the construction engineers never receive lower wages than their constructors who
work
 under directly the engineers’ instructions. The reason of higher level assessment is that not only their specialized engineering knowledge is a valuable but
also
 their educational level is important
for
Suggestion
to
 their company. All in all,
although
 the manual workers contribute to the country’s development, they would get a less
salary
 than highly educated people.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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Example:

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Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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  • Finally
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