A healthy person is often described as someone who has a good diet, gets a lot of exercise and avoids stress.

People in the past used to eat organic food and work hard in
farms
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the farms
or
etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
,
therefore
they used to be
fit but
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fit, but
these days people just go to work and do their job by
then
and the day will be finished. Living in these days contains great deal
stress which
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stress, which
we have to tackle. As a matter of fact being healthy is generally
combination
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a combination
of mind and body exercise due to staying fit and calm. It is important for people to pay attention to their health by their diet and exercise, so they can live longer and better. In my country, there are many differences between
life styles
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyles
in different
cities but
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cities, but
mostly
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most
people are very busy with their jobs and earning money in a way that they do not have time to spend for themselves so usually people prefer to join their daily life to exercising,
for example
they would rather walk to work
instead
of using cars
o
introduces an alternative
or
to
taxis.
Therefore not
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Therefore, not
only they stay healthy due to
exercising
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exercise
, but
also
they will save money on fuel or transportation. Another point is that nowadays people are coping with lots of stressful issues in their lives so exercising and finding some ways to become
calm
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calmer
and eating a great meal after a busy day seems essential. In my country people take yoga or aerobic classes to become
relax
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relaxed
and happy and they try to eat healthy foods
such
as vegetables and there are some people who do simple exercises when they get home. Of course with the topography we have in Iran mountain climbing is a popular sport which has
great
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greater
effect on
body
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the body
and mind. All and all, it is a fact that we need to exercise more than people needed in the past. Not only we will be happy and
relax but
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relax, but
also
we will stay fit by exercising and appropriate diet. In different cities or
countries people
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countries, people
have different
life styles
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyles
and
as a result
different ways of exercising and eating. In my country people try to not waste time and use it
on
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for
exercising and they try to avoid unhealthy food in order to stay healthy.
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