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Nowadays people believe that social networking sites such as Facebook have had a huge negative impact on both individual and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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These days social networking trend has become important and necessary part in our
life
. Some believe
social connection
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the social connection
have
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has
has had
great negative impact
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a great negative impact
in
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on
 our society while
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
disgree
be of different opinions
disagree
. I will discuss both
point
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points
 of view
postive
characterized by or displaying affirmation or acceptance or certainty etc.
positive
 as well as negative.
Firstly
, I would like to say
this
 Nowadays our
life
 has become difficult without social
networking as
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networking, as
 it is the easiest way to
cantact
close interaction
contact
contract
 any person.
Secondly
, I would say it is used in almost every field like offices, schools, hospital and many other
type
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types
 of works.It has many positive aspects.
For instance
, it
has make
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has made
 our
life
 easier and we can
accquire
come into the possession of something concrete or abstract
acquire
acquired
 much knowledge through social connectivity sites.
Additionally
, there is so much learn and which can improve our communication skills and get to know more about people, their lives and
whats
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what's
 happening around the world and it can be extremely useful. Coming to its negative side, If we
use
 it for wrong
purpose it
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purpose, it
 has
negative imapct
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a negative impact
negative impact
in
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on
 our
life
.
For example
, if we
use
 these sites to make one
life
’s in danger. To conclude, we should
use
 these sites to
accquire
come into the possession of something concrete or abstract
acquire
 knowledge or to learn
something but
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something, but
 to avoid
negative
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the negative use, which
the negative use which
use
 which is used for
wrong purpose
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the wrong purpose
wrong purposes
 to make others
life
 in danger.
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