Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Bad
situations
such
as
unsatisfactory
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job or shortage of money inevitably
happens
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around all of us, and the question is whether we should accept or try to improve them. In
this
essay, I will discuss both options and point out which is the best. Of course, when things are fraught with difficulty, it seems better to try and improve
such
situations
. Many people believe that no matter how difficult the
situation
is,
such
as
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job or shortage of money, we can get out of it by finding another job or asking for a raise. Once the problems are overcome, it would be a sense of ease or success, and
furthermore
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valuable lessons to deal with
the
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similar
situations
in the future.
However
, the pressure of trying to overcome difficult
situations
can be vulnerable sometimes, and I think it is time to accept. In two examples mentioned above, there would be
some ones
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who have no chance to change the
situation
. For them, an attempt to change can drain energy
or
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cause stress or event create undesired results, making the
situation
worse. Of course, I do not agree
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accepting for the rest of our
life
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, but when we accept, we rob the
situation
of some of its undesired
effect
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and start to see how to overcome it if we give it time.
Therefore
, an acceptance can be seen as a more positive attitude to improve
bad
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situation
than a hasty attempt.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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