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Growing population is a bid problem in developing countries. Should the government provide new homes in cities or countryside?

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In recent years, the population of Low and Middle Income Countries has been rather explosive and out of proportion. States are planning to ameliorate
this
 through provision of housing. What is less clear is where to situate the houses-urban of rural centres? In my mind, c
ity centre
Suggestion
the city centre
is a better option because
that is
 where the need is. That said, there are several compelling reasons why these accommodations should be built in the metropolis.
Firstly
, over 95% of the population in
this
 region of the world resides in urban places; and
that is
 where the need for housing is felt more. So, by providing housing here, more people would benefit than building in rural areas. Again, building here would save m
ajority
Suggestion
the majority
of the people of the need to start life over again trying to settle down in a new place because most of them live and work in urban centres. If the houses were to be built in rural regions, a significant number of people’s lives might be disrupted due to failure to adapt to a new environment or loss of jobs. Do we begin to create more problems by solving one?
This
 answer is no.
Lastly
,
this
 gesture from the government would ameliorate the consequences of overcrowding
such
 as the spread of pneumonia and tuberculosis as well as social vices in the metropolis where these are predominant.
On the contrary
, though, some people will prefer that construction of
this
 new housing scheme be done in rural areas.
This
 is because it prevents the destruction of the few green spaces available in urban centres.
However
, building here would require additional cost from authorities because public services
such
 as public transportation, health and education which are not the current reality in developing countries are needed to complement p
rovision
Suggestion
the provision
of housing. Overall, in solving the problem of overpopulation in the
third
 world countries, I think that the benefits of building houses for the masses in cities override whatever benefit housing in rural areas has to offer.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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