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Some people think that the teenagers should concentrate on all subjects at school. Other believe that teenagers should focus on the subject they are best at or they are most interested in. To what extent do you agree? Write at least 250 words.

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In the whole world, the level of qualification of an individual is measured by the subjects what they had learnt. Some people believe that the youngster should study all subjects till their secondary level
education
. Other folks support to learn and focus on any particular
subject
 to develop the attraction towards that
subject
 and acquire a deep knowledge. I strongly support that the latter point would structure the student's career path with more accuracy for their success.
Firstly
, teenagers should fix their goal in the lower secondary level
education
 to start to work on their plans. When they study every
subject
, they cannot fix the focus on only
one
 or two subjects, which make a question in their upcoming studies where to focus.
For example
, Oxford University had research on
this
 issue and given that most of the youngsters could not select their field of tertiary
education
. So, the mismatch path makes the student's future into darkness. By focusing on
one
 or two subjects from secondary
education
 can brighten the student to choose the appropriate path to achieve a successful career.
Secondly
, the
time
 spend to study a particular
subject
 is less, and the extra
time
 can be used to develop skills want to be needed for life.
For example
, the left out
time
 apart from studies can be used to learn how to cook or how to manage the responsibility etc. Each individual's behaviour influences with
this
 life learning activities.
Moreover
, the youngster can spend more
time
 with their parents and the bond between them become stronger than the previous ones. In conclusion,
instead
 of making the offsprings to learn every
subject
 to get a mix of unbalanced knowledge, the individual can keep the focus point on
one
 or two subjects and make the profession into
one
 particular field to obtain greater success.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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