Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Public
health
is an issue that people pay more and more attention on it since they realize the significance of equal both work and personal health
. I personally believe that increasing the amount of sport facilities can only do a limited influence on public health
.
First
of all, doing sport are positively related to our health
, but cannot fundamentally solve the problems of our health
crisis. According to the research, most of our length of life
are determined
by our Suggestion
is determined
gene
, Suggestion
genes
although
a healthy life style
might extend it a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
for
some extent. Doing sport regularly can benefit our Suggestion
to
health
status but
cannot avoid the disease that caused by our Accept comma addition
status, but
gene
. For example
, a famous Hollywood superstar Angelina Jolie had a surgery to remove her breast just to prevent breast cancer in advance caused by the gene
. Only people with healthy gene
and live with a proper life
can make a win-win situation for our health
.
On the other hand
, there are still some measures play an important role in our life
. We should not only maintain a healthy life but
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life, but
also
try to focus other methods to prevent potential damage to our health
. Due to modern technology and the research in biological
, we have already made a huge improvement in improving public Suggestion
biology
health
compared to the past. In the past, people can only judge their BMI by measuring their weight and height. But now we also
have body fat machine
to provide other information Suggestion
a body fat machine
of
our body. Suggestion
about
As a result
, there might be new index that could tell the status of our health
.
In conclusion, there are a lot of factors that can influence our health
. We should not just focus on one measure but
should have another solution to it. By doing so, we can make a great progress in public Accept comma addition
measure, but
health
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite
