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Every minute, every day, people suffer and lives are lost needlessly because of a lack of safe water and sanitation. the Population is being viewed as the real problem and controlling birth rates should totally address the problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

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Over population
Suggestion
Overpopulation
 is one of the leading causes of malnutrition and poor quality of life of people living in
third
 world countries. I totally agree that birth control is one way to solve the issue. I believe that people who lives in poor areas where potable
water
 is inaccessible usually are malnourished. Their environment
also
 poses a big threat to their health because their surroundings are dirty and the people
does not pay
Suggestion
do not pay
 attention about its cleanliness. Children and old people are the most vulnerable group to acquire the illness through unclean
water
 and improper food preparation. Some cases lead to the death of these vulnerable
group
Suggestion
groups
 of people. I
also
 believe that health teachings like family planning, be it natural or artificial, is essential to every couple. Parents to be should be educated regarding the effects if having either a small or big family. They should plan how many children they want and they can afford to provide a good quality of life
to
Suggestion
for
 their family, that us having a healthy meals, clean
water
, safe environment and able to send the children to school.
Furthermore
, teaching them about proper waste disposal and cleanliness of the environment is
also
 important to achieve. In conclusion, increased number of people living in a small area
makes
Suggestion
make
 the place crowded. Safe drinking
water
 is really important to have a healthy populace. To have a small family and be able to provide for their needs is ideal. Family planning can help reduce the effects of the booming population,
thus
 good quality
if
connects a noun with the preceding word
of
 life can be attained by every human being.
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