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People sleep less than before in many countries. Why do people sleep less? What effect does it have on an individually and on society?

The people of
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sleep
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 less compared to the past. The main reason for
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 trend is that people spend most of their time on digital tools. Lack of
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 leads to
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 problems and drowsy driving, which is a major problem in many countries. The people of
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 suffer from
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 problems due to several causes and these problems
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 come with society-related problems. Reasons why we’re not getting enough
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 abound, but one of the biggest changes behind the
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 decline is the availability of electricity and technological advances that allow us to work and play 24/7.
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, using computers and phones for playing interactive games and social networking can activate and excite the brain, making it harder to fall asleep. As a consequence, people are lack of
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.
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 insufficient
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 is thought as a waste of time, it causes severe consequences
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 as insomnia,
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 deprivation, poor
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. Researchers estimate that more than 70 million Americans suffer from a
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 disorder.
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, sleepiness is a major cause of traffic accidents. It can impair (zayıflatmak) driving performance as much or more so than alcohol, studies show. According to official statistics, sleepiness is a contributing factor in up to 30% of traffic accidents.
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 of
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, bedtimes have become later, but wake times have not. The result is a
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-deprived society. In conclusion, many people do not care about to
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 more time anymore. The attractive nature of the online world
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 is keeping people awake
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 and it leads a decline in the
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 duration of people. The
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 decline affects both the mental and the efficiency of driving performance and result in a
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-deprived society.

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