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Famous people sometimes give their opinions on public topics.Is this a good thing?To what extend do you agree or disagree

#people #topics
Nowadays,
world
renowed
widely known and esteemed
renowned
 people have started commenting on International, National and local issues. It has been
appriciated
fully understood or grasped
appreciated
world
 wide and celebrities have been encouraged to comment on social issues. I strongly believe that famous people should put
on
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in
 their opinion regarding societal issues,
this
 essay talks about the same with some relevant examples.
Firstly
, celebrities are popular among masses because of their successful life and charm.
This
 popularity can be used to bring up a public topic in
everyones's
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everyone's
everyone
 eye by simply commenting on it.
For instance
, Indian actress Shipa Shetty spoke on Racial Biasness during
thr
definite article
the
their
 show Big Brother in the United Kingdom and people started condemning it all over the
world
 and soon the country had to pass a strict law against racial
biasness
a partiality that prevents objective consideration of an issue or situation
biases
business
 in public.
Moreover
, due to celebrities pointing out a public topic, it can result in a
world wide
involving the entire earth; not limited or provincial in scope
worldwide
 movement. It is because today's youth is very much connected to social media and famous people are using
this
 platform more often to write in against
a
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an
 issue.
Thus
, they have a chance to connect with
larger audience
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a larger audience
larger audiences
 through commenting on social media.
However
, there is a flip side of
this
 topic too. Some struggling Actors, Sportsmans and Politicians, just to gain required attention of
public
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the public
, start commenting on some sensitive social issues. They see
this
 practice as
easy and effective way
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an easy and effective way
 to gain public attention, but they
do not see the wider
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have not seen in the wider
have not seen the wider
 picture before commenting. For them
this
 is just a publicity stunt and they are least concerned about the issue. In conclusion, I
believe to
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believe, to
 make our youth more aware about certain public issues and to bring it in everyone's notice
,
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,
 celebrities should comment on it without any selfish motive behind it.
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