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Last year many famous pop and sports stars earned millions of dollars each. Many other entertainment and sports personalities also have very high incomes.On the other hand,most people in ordinary professions like nurses, doctors and teachers earn only a small fraction of the incomes of these stars. What do you think about stars receiving very high salaries? IS IT fair that people with jobs that directly help people are paid much less? give reasons for your answer.

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Well-known personalities like
sportsatars
a close observer; someone who looks at something (such as an exhibition of some kind)
spectators
 and actors are often spotted carrying luxurious handbags
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commuting in vintage cars
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wearing expensive outfits.What is the secret behind
such
 kind of
livng
the experience of being alive; the course of human events and activities
living
? The answer is handsome salary
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they earn in their professions.
On the other hand
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doctors, engineers, teachers are receiving very low wages as compared to these stars.
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The essay
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 will discuss
this
 issue before coming to any conclusion. Doctors are living Gods on earth.They treat people against various fatal diseases.But in return
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they are underpaid.For an instance
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my cousin who is
heart specialist
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a heart specialist
the heart specialist
 earns only$5000 a month.
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even the
spotboys
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spot boys
 or junior staff working in
glamour industry
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the glamour industry
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gets
very good salary package
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a very good salary package
.Lawyers
also
 serve society by imparting
justice but
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justice, but
 after doing
work
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the work
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heartedly
in a heated manner
heatedly
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they get little remuneration.Same is the case with teachers
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they are
also
 paid less as compared to their contribution towards mankind. Image of movie stars is projected as of
hero
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a hero
 on the screen due to which people start loving them
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replicating their attitude. But in reality,
this
 is not the case, a myriad of famous personalities consume sedative substances
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use abusive languages
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disrespect their parents.Huge fan following is one of the prime
reason
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reasons
 why these folks demand trillions of dollars as their salaries. To conclude,
their
in or at that place
there
 must be regulatory system in which
payscale
involving the body as distinguished from the mind or spirit
physical
 must be decided as per the criticality of the job and contribution towards society not in terms of popularity.If
such
 thing does not happen
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then
 will we be not having any doctor to treat us
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teacher to impart education
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And
 lawyer to protect our citizen's rights.
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