Last year many famous pop and sports stars earned millions of dollars each. Many other entertainment and sports personalities also have very high incomes.On the other hand,most people in ordinary professions like nurses, doctors and teachers earn only a small fraction of the incomes of these stars. What do you think about stars receiving very high salaries? IS IT fair that people with jobs that directly help people are paid much less? give reasons for your answer.

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Well-known personalities like

sportstars

someone who is dazzlingly skilled in any field

superstars

and actors are often spotted carrying luxurious handbags, commuting in vintage cars

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wearing expensive outfits. What is the secret behind

such

kind of

livng

the experience of being alive; the course of human events and activities

living

? The answer is handsome salary

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they earn in their professions.

On the other hand

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doctors, engineers, teachers are receiving very low wages as compared to these stars.

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The essay

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will discuss

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issue before coming to any conclusion. Doctors are living Gods on earth.They treat people against various fatal diseases.But in return

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they are underpaid.For an instance

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my cousin who is

heart specialist

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a heart specialist

the heart specialist

earns only$5000 a month.

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even the

spotboys

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spot boys

or junior staff working in

glamour industry

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the glamour industry

get

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gets

very good salary package

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a very good salary package

.Lawyers

also

serve society by imparting

justice but

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they get little remuneration.Same is the case with teachers

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they are

also

paid less as compared to their contribution towards mankind. Image of movie stars is projected as of

hero

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a hero

on the screen due to which people start loving them

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replicating their attitude. But in reality,

this

is not the case, a myriad of famous personalities consume sedative substances

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use abusive languages

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disrespect their parents.Huge fan following is one of the prime

reason

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reasons

why these folks demand trillions of dollars as their salaries. To conclude,

their

in or at that place

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must be regulatory system in which

payscale

involving the body as distinguished from the mind or spirit

physical

must be decided as per the criticality of the job and contribution towards society not in terms of popularity.If

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thing does not happen

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then

will we be not having any doctor to treat us

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teacher to impart education

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lawyer to protect our citizen's rights.

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