Universities and colleges are now offering qualifications through distance learning from the internet rather than teachers in the classroom. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

In the contemporary youth,
education play
Accept comma addition
education, play
an instrumental role every one's life because without education people is nothing and education is
third eye
Suggestion
the third eye
of human beings. Many individuals learn the study help with
internet
Suggestion
the internet
. I
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
belief
believed
that it is
good source
Suggestion
a good source
for
studay
be a student; follow a course of study; be enrolled at an institute of learning
study
. I think
adventage
Suggestion
an advantage
advantage
of
this
development
outweight
be heavier than
outweigh
the
disadventage
the quality of having an inferior or less favorable position
disadvantages
disadvantage
. Cheap rather than
college
and university because same people do not pay the
college
fees. Due to they get a knowledge in internet services.
Moreover
, time saving
beacause
for the reason that; on account of
because
social being
do not go
Suggestion
does not go
to other places as well as they not pay the bus
fess
a fixed charge for a privilege or for professional services
fees
fears
fuels
and so on.
In addition
to, human beings learn the
qualifacation
an attribute that must be met or complied with and that fits a person for something
qualification
qualifications
help with
sophiscated
having or appealing to those having worldly knowledge and refinement and savoir-faire
sophisticated
technology and get more knowledge rather than university because they learn
new word
Suggestion
new words
a new word
and high
vocab
relating to or designed for or using the singing voice
vocal
.
On the other hand
, do not understand the mistake because if they do not
consulted
Suggestion
consult
with with teacher
Suggestion
with the teacher
with with the teacher
how they improve mistake.
Furthermore
, do not provide classroom environment and do not make new friends. If they
not meet
Suggestion
aren't meeting
new people and
souals not
Accept comma addition
souls, not
souls not
sales not
seals not
get knowledge related society because
school
Suggestion
the school
and
college
provide the many facilities because school organise many
fucation
Suggestion
vacations
vacation
fiction
and student get a chance show the talent
such
as sports program, and so on. To
conclude it
Accept comma addition
conclude, it
can be noted that its many
postive
characterized by or displaying affirmation or acceptance or certainty etc.
positive
but negative
can not
can not
cannot
be
neglacted
disregarded
neglected
.
Public
Suggestion
The public
should use
internet
Suggestion
the internet
for
studay
be a student; follow a course of study; be enrolled at an institute of learning
study
steady
but do not reduce went to
college
and university
,
Accept space
,
better it is.
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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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