In modern society, many people think primary school should teach science and technology rather than history and geography which are useless and boring. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Some of the children are pretty easy to get angry easily if mothers forgotten to feed them on
time
. Others may feel pretty calm and alert mothers quietly. Is our characteristics born
with
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to
have much
influence
on our
personality
? Or the experiences we may have in our
life
have more
influence
on it? In
this
essay, I am going to discuss both cases. There is a Chinese proverb that says "I can predict what you are doing in eighty when you are three year-old". People believe our
personality
are mainly affected
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has mainly affected
by our characteristics, which we are naturally born with. Some people are trying really hard to get everything perfect, they would like to get everything done in a hundred percent, without any single error. They are the perfectionist. Others might be pretty happy with things just done eighty percent, as they accept things cannot be perfect and they
are satisfy
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are satisfying
are satisfied
have satisfied
what have been done. We can see these kind of personalities on children, and if you are a perfectionist when you are a child, you are normally a perfectionist when you are an adult.
However
, others might argue that events that we
experiences
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experience
in our
life
the period during which something is functional (as between birth and death)
lifetime
time
influence
our
personality
. I believe things happen in our
life
might affect our
personality
, but it is only limited to really big events. I might be easily annoyed by people
arriving work
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arriving to work
late. Even though, I know there are various reasons, that late cannot be prevented. I still will get annoyed no matter what the truth is. Lateness annoys me, no matter what. While I have
also
seen people was annoyed by lateness, until one day, he
understand
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understands
he is going to dead soon, and he understands there are things more important than being on
time
. So big events in
life
does
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do
influence
people, but it limits to some really rare case only. I have discussed if our
personality
are
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is
what we born with, or can easily influenced by the events we experienced in our
life
the period during which something is functional (as between birth and death)
lifetime
time
. My point of view is that, our
personality
are mainly sharped
Suggestion
is mainly shaped
are mainly shaped
by the characteristics we are born with. Events happened in our
life
time
might
influence
our personally, but
it
it is
it's
only limited to events that really have a big impact in our
life
,
such
as, a car accident, or recover from
a
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an
almost dead experiences.

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