In modern society, many people think primary school should teach science and technology rather than history and geography which are useless and boring. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Some of the children are pretty easy to get angry easily if mothers forgotten to feed them on

time

. Others may feel pretty calm and alert mothers quietly. Is our characteristics born

with

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have much

influence

on our

personality

? Or the experiences we may have in our

life

have more

influence

on it? In

this

essay, I am going to discuss both cases. There is a Chinese proverb that says "I can predict what you are doing in eighty when you are three year-old". People believe our

personality

are mainly affected

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has mainly affected

by our characteristics, which we are naturally born with. Some people are trying really hard to get everything perfect, they would like to get everything done in a hundred percent, without any single error. They are the perfectionist. Others might be pretty happy with things just done eighty percent, as they accept things cannot be perfect and they

are satisfy

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are satisfying

are satisfied

have satisfied

what have been done. We can see these kind of personalities on children, and if you are a perfectionist when you are a child, you are normally a perfectionist when you are an adult.

However

, others might argue that events that we

experiences

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experience

in our

life

the period during which something is functional (as between birth and death)

lifetime

time

influence

our

personality

. I believe things happen in our

life

might affect our

personality

, but it is only limited to really big events. I might be easily annoyed by people

arriving work

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arriving to work

late. Even though, I know there are various reasons, that late cannot be prevented. I still will get annoyed no matter what the truth is. Lateness annoys me, no matter what. While I have

also

seen people was annoyed by lateness, until one day, he

understand

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understands

he is going to dead soon, and he understands there are things more important than being on

time

. So big events in

life

does

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influence

people, but it limits to some really rare case only. I have discussed if our

personality

are

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what we born with, or can easily influenced by the events we experienced in our

life

the period during which something is functional (as between birth and death)

lifetime

time

. My point of view is that, our

personality

are mainly sharped

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is mainly shaped

are mainly shaped

by the characteristics we are born with. Events happened in our

life

time

might

influence

our personally, but

it is

it's

only limited to events that really have a big impact in our

life

such

as, a car accident, or recover from

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almost dead experiences.

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