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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing.Do you agree or disagree?

#growth #shops #towns #cities
There is no doubt that the trend of shopping online is booming.
Due to
 the increasing trend, some people believe that all local shops will be locked down,
while
, I believe that the grocery and medical stores will be unaffected. E-shopping
sites
 like Amazon, have attracted young
crowd
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 by offering unbeatable deals and discounts.
This
 is because these
sites
 want the customer to shop online and enhance their outreach. If these
sites
won't
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don't
 offer deals, the customers would prefer to visit local stores, without having to wait, to receive the item.
In addition
, the
sites
 offer a better range of products, especially in the fashion department, which is not possible for a local store
due to
 financial and space constraints. Unbeatable deals and
wide
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 range of variety lure
consumer
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 to shop online.
On the other hand
, grocery and medical stores will still remain open. The main reason is that
,
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 the websites or the online shopping platforms are not capable
to meet
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 the local demands of the region. To illustrate, the online platforms target the community as one,
while
 the local shops target a small community and they will have products based on their preference.
In addition
 to it, in case of
medical
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 emergency, it is easier and quicker for a person to buy medication from a nearby store, than ordering it online.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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