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In many cities the use of video cameras in public places is being increased in order to reduce crime, but some people believe that these measures restrict our individual freedom. Do the benefits of increased security outweigh the drawbacks?

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There has been a rise in the use of CCTV cameras in most urban areas in order to curb crime rates.
Although
, it is believed by most individuals that,
this
 method in an invasion on one's privacy.
However
, I think the benefits of beefing up security measures far outweigh the displeasure felt by the people. It is true that security cameras has contributed significantly to a drop in crime rates. The installation of these gadgets in places
such
 as banks, shopping malls and stores has tremendously decreased the rate of armed robbery.
This
 is because the video footage recorded on these cameras can be used to identify perpetrators and serve as evidence in court to penalise offenders.
For example
, many homeowners have now installed cameras in their homes.
This
 gives them a sense of reassurance and peace of mind, because the cameras will deter thieves from breaking in.
However
, despite the security advantages of video cameras, there are some drawbacks
such
 as the restriction of people’s freedom and the ability to manipulate camera footage. People generally want to be free and enjoy their private lives without being monitored. When cameras are installed in almost every corner of the street, people may begin to feel uncomfortable.
Also
, hidden cameras are not perfect because they can be manipulated or doctored to wrongly accuse an innocent person.
For instance
, some criminals know where cameras are hidden and they easily avoid them or cover up their faces to escape recognition. In conclusion,
although
 the advent of CCTV cameras has contributed to a drop in crime rates, It is
also
 being used to invade people's privacy,
thus
 denying people of their freedom in the society.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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