Nowadays, internet and television have given ordinary people a chance to become famous. Is this a positive or negative development?

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The wide reach of television an online communication, has opened doors for common people, to become famous by showcasing their skills at both national and international
level
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levels
. I completely opine, that with
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the advent
of these modern communication mediums, every individual received
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a major boost
in self expression.
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with, various television channels nowadays stream live talent shows. These shows cover
wide
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wider
aspects of natural skills pertaining to singing, cooking, action, dancing and many more options related to entertainment. One major factor in their popularity is that they draw participation from
general public across nation
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the general public across nation
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Also these
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Also, these
shows have nationwide reach. Over
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last years many
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the last years, many
the last years many
common people
have reached
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reached
stardom level after winning these shows. No doubt
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also
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helps in benefiting them economically as well.
Similarly
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internet has
also
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helped
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the lives
of
general public
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the general public
by providing them international stage for showcasing their skills. One major example is online video streaming service
providor
someone whose business is to supply a particular service or commodity
providers
provider
YouTube. Over
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last decade
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the last decade
, hundreds of people have benefited through it by showcasing their skills in IT, education, dancing, music and much more. These people have earned
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the status
of
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Gods in their respective fields and enjoy following of million of people.
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, they
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also helps
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also help
in generating
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secondary, indirect
employment through
anciliory
furnishing added support
ancillary
services in
professions
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the professions
across photography, editing, tourism and local hospitality
providors
someone whose business is to supply a particular service or commodity
providers
provides
provider
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Finally they
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Finally, they
also
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get financial stability by earning
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advertising
revenue, which
otherwise
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they would have never thought of. To conclude, television an
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the internet
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have opened
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the flood gates
es for every person, having mastery in respective field, to express and present himself for global recognition an
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the possibility
ty of earning a celebrity status

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