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In past , the role of teacher was to provide information. Today, students have access to wide sources of information. There is , therefore, no role of teacher in modern education. Do you agree or disagree?

#role #teacher #information #students #access #sources #education
Some people believe that everything we can
gether
assemble or get together
gather
gathered
 from
internet
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the internet
 so the role of teacher not need in modern life But I totally disagree about
statement
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the statement
. There are lots of facilities
to
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for
 getting information on our
hand
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hand, such
such
 as laptop, mobile phones, radio...
etc.
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Etc.
 If we access the topic on
internet
 get a wide range of
data but
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data, but
 the
think
a special situation
thing
 is reliability is less. Students
have confuce
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have confused
have confuse
 which is
correct
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correct, such
such
 as If they search heat theory on
internet
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the internet
 that will show
huge amount
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a huge amount
 of links, which one is correct from the
all
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oil
wall
.
if
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If
 they choose one
link
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link, then
then
 vast
amont
a quantity of money
amount
amounts
 of details will display from that,
Then
 again confusion will appear, which details are need which are not. The purpose of studying is getting clear knowledge about unknown
topics but
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topics, but
 now a
days
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day
 of modern world
failure
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failed
fails
 to achieve their purpose of studying. The teachers not only responsible to developing knowledge of
children but
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children, but
also
 improving their good
behaviors
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
. “How to obey elders, How to grow
their
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Their
 relationship between family, how to
been
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be
being
 friendly,
humanity
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humane
, Compassionly, strongly and actively and how to get suitable decisions in critical situation”
,
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,
those are
teached
impart skills or knowledge to
taught
 by teachers to students.
who
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Who
 think student no need to go to school, only
internet
 is enough to getting information, I need to ask them a question,
that is
 “ how do those children learn how to behave in social”? To put in a crushed, l pen
down saying
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down, saying
 that, modern sources can’t play a role like same as
teacher
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a teacher
. All students are not like
same
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the same
, so teachers know very well about information have to provide which student.
Although
 the modern technology can’t replace role of teacher in our society

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