Eating too much of sugar is harmful for health. Some people think it is government's responsibility to limit people's sugar consumption while others think it is individual's responsibility to limit the amount of sugar they eat. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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11 - Sep - 2019
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signs and symptoms of the participants.
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for challenging behaviour is not good for publishing.
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, Lyn, Nick More-in-depth discussion about which variables should be published --DELETED LINK-- 06 - Sep - 2019
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about that problem in the next meeting. (ongoing). Le needs
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writing other papers as well (not yet). Le needs to send everyone key publications using
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from the ASK project (done). Le needs to develop better academic writing and oral skills (ongoing).
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needs to select members of the
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board (ongoing).
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suggested adolescents have high-risk behaviours: alcohol,
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(not poorer health status). (the
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has been corrected)
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suggested that
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could give an insight into how well we are looking after adolescents with ID (ongoing), and Le should
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to compare with the healthy population. (ongoing)
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has commented on the first draft of the
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library now. (not finished) Le needs to sign the
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access confidentiality form (done). 31 July 2019
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, Le identify papers that have been published using Ask
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(including which
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set they used - eg questionnaire, CHAP, GP notes) (done) identify key papers looking at
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of adolescents with intellectual disability (done) meet with Dave to confirm that cross-sectional
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(done) Prevalence and incidence? (done)

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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