Food travels thousands of miles from producers to consumers. Some people think that it would be better for the environment and economy if people ate only the local food produced by farmers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Local
food
produced by the farmers wins over the mass-produced
food
for commercial consumption on so many levels. In my view, we need to encourage the local farmers and provide
suitable environment
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a suitable environment
such
that the local product gets to
market
. We cannot guarantee the quality of foods that come from far lands, as there are no proper quality control and check system in Nepal.
Also
to travel
such
a long distance the
food
need to undergo the process of artificial alterations. Artificial preservatives are added to
such
products to make it look fresh and
sellable
capable of being sold; fit for sale
saleable
soluble
even after many days. Those chemicals have many adverse effects on the health of the consumers. In some cases, like if the
food
cannot be grown locally or available in the
country
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country, then
then
it is acceptable to import from foreign countries for
e
objective form of "I"
me
.g. Nepal being a landlocked country is forced to import seafood products. But in many
cases though
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cases, though
the products are grown in abundance
for
example apples
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example, apples
of
Mustang
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the Mustang
Mustangs
and oranges of Dhankuta, due to poor execution on
government’s part
Suggestion
the government’s part
they don’t reach the
market
and farmers are forced to throw them away or sell them at a very low price. Tragic situations like
this
need to be improved. The poor farmers are not getting the money and recognition for their hard
work whereas
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work, whereas
the country is paying a large sum of money to import from other countries. Consumers are missing out on fresh foods packed with nutrients and paying double the price for stale chemical-induced
food
. If the government thinks in
favor
promote over another
favour
of local farmers and
takes
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take
action
accordingly be
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accordingly, be
it by making proper provision of transportation, by introducing farmers to advanced technologies, by giving them a secure environment to grow more or by giving them good
market
price it will be a win-win situation for both. In the near future, I would like to see more of local products in the
market
rather than some unnecessarily expensive stale products wrapped up in fancy packaging.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • environmentally friendly
  • carbon emissions
  • long-distance transportation
  • biodiversity
  • pesticides
  • fertilizers
  • local economy
  • sustainability
  • feasible
  • diverse range
  • food choices
  • cultural identity
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