Television dominates the free-time of too many people. It can make people lazy and prevent them from socializing with others. Do you agree or disagree?

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In today's modern t
echniqually
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techniques
technically
developed world, most of the people spending
time
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i
nfront
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in front
of
television
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's. It is thought by some people that
television
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helps each individual in improving knowledge while other's think that it is killing free
time
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of too m
ay
a quantifier that can be used with count nouns and is often preceded by 'as' or 'too' or 'so' or 'that'; amounting to a large but indefinite number
many
people, making them lazy and preventing them from socializing with others. I totally agree that televisions, tablets & other electronic e
ntertinement
an activity that is diverting and that holds the attention
entertainment
devises wasting i
ndividuals
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individual's
time
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, making them lazy and not allowing them to meet n
ighbours,
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbours
friends, relatives and others.
Firstly
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, every person spends most of their day t
imein
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time in
their professional life once after reaching home in the evening sits i
nfront
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in front
of
t
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elevision
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the television
and becomes lazy in completing personal tasks. On the one hand each individual getting relaxed from s
tressfull job
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the stressful job
stressful job
a stressful job
stressful jobs
on the other hand
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individual could not concentrate and f
ulfill
put in effect
fulfil
his personal life activities.
For instance
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, a study describes that most of the d
ivource
the legal dissolution of a marriage
divorce
cases are because of not s
pendng
the act of spending or disbursing money
spending
spend
enough
time
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with spouse. Another point is children are not taken care by their parents. On top of that, teachers in many schools and university's complain about students spend less
time
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with parents.
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, unnecessary shopping is performed by looking into advertisements on
television
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. Many people argue that by spending more
time
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i
nfront
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in front
of
television
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will make individual physically week and more impact of eyes.
Secondly
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, because of spending too many hours watching TV many people could not able to make
time
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to meet their relatives, friends & n
ighbours
easily agitated
nervous
because of
this
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it is impacting on socializing.
F
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urther more
in addition
Furthermore
relations are not long lasting, c
ommunication
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communicate
between each others getting poor. Apart from that children's are not k
nowing
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known
their relatives & n
ighbours.
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbours
neighbour's
neighbour
As long as t
heir
in or at that place
there
is good s
ocilizing
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socializing, then
socializing then
socialising then
then
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only a healthy s
ociaty
an extended social group having a distinctive cultural and economic organization
society
can be built.
For example
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, p
roplems
a state of difficulty that needs to be resolved
problems
in c
olony
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a colony
the colony
can s
orted
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sort
out when the people in colony get s
ocialize.
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socialized
Finally
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, i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
strongly agree that spending more
time
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on televisions, laptops, tablets, smart phones and other electronic devises are the reasons for b
ecomming
according with custom or propriety
becoming
lazy and bringing far from social life.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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