Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

There are numerous environmental concerns in the
world
we live in today.
However
, some are of the opinion of that,
extinction
Suggestion
the extinction
of some animal kind is the most significant of these issues while others believe
there
Suggestion
they're
more pressing
nature
related matters than that. In my view, I
also
agree that there are many crucial issues
regaring
with regard or relation to
regarding
environment
Suggestion
the environment
than
loss
Suggestion
the loss
of a
particualar
unique or specific to a person or thing or category
particular
soecie
the place where something begins, where it springs into being
source
.
To begin
with, some
species
are crucial part of the
nature
because they help the sustainability of
nature
.
For example
beas
have
bears
bees
beans
are known to help the food production process of trees.
Hence
, if that particular
species
are no more
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
the impact of environment on that would be enormous. Most scientists argue that sustainability of
nature
laies
tell an untruth; pretend with intent to deceive
lies
lays
on
chain
Suggestion
the chain
a chain
of events rather than singular involvement of each
species
.
In other words
, every part of the
nature including
Accept comma addition
nature, including
humans
depends
Suggestion
depend
on one or more
othe
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
of
species
.
Therefore
, environment as a whole relay on survival of all of
this
plural of "this"
these
those
components of it.
Nevertheless
, considering
number
Suggestion
the number
of current development of the
world
that are harming the
nature
, extinction of
species
is somewhat insignificant. Because some of these
issue
Suggestion
issues
such
as global
wearming
the process of becoming warmer; a rising temperature
warming
we arming
is the course of loss of some animal kinds.
Moreover
, global
wearming
the process of becoming warmer; a rising temperature
warming
we arming
worming
warning
is the root
course
events that provide the generative force that is the origin of something
cause
of
rise
Suggestion
the rise
of sea levels around the
world
which has
endangored
(of flora or fauna) in imminent danger of extinction
endangered
the future
existance
the state or fact of existing
existence
of some nations,
for instance
Moldus. Another pressing matter is
deviation
Suggestion
the deviation
a deviation
of rainfall all over the
world
.
This
problem has affected the agriculture production and availability of drinking water.
Then
again drinking
Accept comma addition
again, drinking
water is vital for survival of all kinds of animals.  To recapitulate,
although
existance
Suggestion
the existence
existence
of some
species
is important for the
environmantal
of or relating to the external conditions or surroundings
environmental
sustainability, global warming and variation in weather pattern are more
alarminng
frightening because of an awareness of danger
alarming
than that and they are the
primay
of first rank or importance or value; direct and immediate rather than secondary
primary
reasons of the extinction of
species
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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