Some modern artists receive huge sums of money for the things they create, while others struggle to survive. Governments should take steps to resolve this unfair situation.

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It is no secret that some contemporary artists earn enormous amounts of money and can afford to live in the lap of luxury, while others can hardly make ends meet, starving in a garret. There is a point of view that the authorities should intervene to fix
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injustice by virtue of not conforming with rules or standards
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I completely disagree with
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opinion.
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of all, people who are at the threshold of choosing their career paths, should be aware of the fact that some occupations are more stable, in terms of mo
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money making
than others. Take,
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, the food industry. It was, is, and will remain one of the most rewarding businesses on the planet. The reason for
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is the fact that food consumption is one of the basic needs of a human being. Meanwhile, according to the Maslow's hierarchy of needs, people can get interested in ar
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the arts
nly after covering their basic needs (particularly the need for food). From
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perspective, a baker is in a more privileged position than an artist.
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, a person who opts to work in less down-to-earth spheres should realize that there are not any guarantees that their pieces of art will be highly ap
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place.
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, governments have more important tasks to accomplish rather than bridging the gap between wealthy and fo
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rtists.
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and foremost, the authorities should support socially vulnerable groups,
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as people with disabilities, orphans and single senior citizens.
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, reducing overall poverty among all layers of the society should be a priority. Not only destitute artists should be subsidized, but
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any member of the society who found th
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themselves on
he edge of survival. To conclude, I support the opinion that governments are not responsible for the income gap between highly paid artists and their less successful co
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since being an artist is a conscious choice which can be reviewed if necessary. Ideally, politics should invest more effort to
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • income disparity
  • struggling artists
  • market demand
  • public preference
  • government support
  • grants
  • funding
  • exhibitions
  • cultural wealth
  • societal benefits
  • market dynamics
  • government intervention
  • art market
  • public taste
  • private investment
  • balanced artistic community
  • financial assistance
  • creative industry
  • artistic merit
  • economic sustainability
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