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Development in technology causes environmental problems. Some people believe the solution to these problems is everyone accepts a simpler way of life, while others say that technology can solve these problems. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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People have argued about the negative effect of
technology
 on the environment. A group of people think that rather than following the development of
technology
, we should have a simpler
way
 of life.
However
, others disagree as they believe that
technology
 could address environmental issues. On the
one
 hand, it is undeniable that the rapid development of
technology
 has caused some environmental problems. Many inventions are beneficial for human beings, but they have a catastrophic effect on the environment.
For example
, the invention of cars that use fossil fuel has caused some serious effect on the world. The cars produce carbon
monoxide which
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monoxide, which
 is not only dangerous for living creatures, but it
also
 becomes the main cause of global warming.
Therefore
, some people believe that we should change our lifestyle into a simpler
one
.
One
 of the ways is by using a friendly
environmental transportation
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environmental, transportation
such
 as using a bicycle to commute. The bicycle is not only safe for the environment, but it could
also
 be used as a
way
 of exercise.
On the other hand
, other people believe that
technology
 could be used as a
way
 to resolve environmental problems. As we can see that
one
 of the biggest threat to the earth’s civilisation is the usage of the
plastic
 bag. The waste of
plastic
 bags has become a big issue, as they could only be composed for about 100 years.
However
, with the new
technology
, scientists have found a new
way
 of producing
plastic
 bags. With the new formula,
plastic
 bags could be recycled;
therefore
 it would resolve
one
 of the environmental issues. In my opinion, I do believe that
technology
 is beneficial for human beings if we used it wisely and proportionately. I personally believe that research for new
technology
 should be continued, as we need to have improvements in life, but the government should review and monitor
this
 research properly. [

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