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Few decades ago several students used to pursue their higher education in their home country. However, in recent times there is an increased number of students flying abroad for their studies.

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A few decades ago several students used to pursue their higher education in their
home
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country
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.
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, in recent times there is an increased number of students flying abroad for their studies. In my opinion,
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 trend will benefit the
student
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 to explore the education
system
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of
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on
 the other side of
world
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the world
 and simultaneously
home
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country
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 will lose potential and talented candidates. The major advantage of moving to
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
country
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 for study purpose is exploring the new
educational
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education
system
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 and understanding their methodology of imparting knowledge.
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 will help the students to understand subject matter more practically and effectively as compared to the
home
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country
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 education
system
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. It has been observed that students studying in abroad are practically more exposed than a regional candidate. International colleges will provide the platforms to study with
most advanced
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more advanced
 techniques and standards that will prepare them for real time market.
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,
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 trend will lead to brain drain policy, as talented candidate will leave the
home
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country
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 and most of the times potential candidates never return because of lucrative and handsome salaries paid in the abroad.
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, the
student
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 will apply for permanent visa from
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an initial student visa
initial student visa
student
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 visa leading to loss of talented human resource to
home
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country
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. The recent studies show that only 20% of the students who went to abroad will return to
home
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country
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.
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 will affect the
home
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country
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 resource, loosing
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extraordinarily
 talented students. In conclusion, moving abroad for studies has several advantages as a
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student but
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student, but
, the brain drain
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 will have a negative impact on the
home
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country
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 resources.
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