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With internet improvements, people can share views or opinions on certain goods or services that they have purchased. Is this a good or a bad thing? Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The development of the
internet
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 has helped to share our comments about the products and services we often use. In my view, these online services
have provide
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have provided
 numerous benefit to the customers.
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 with, before the common use of the
internet
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 most people bought
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product
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a product
the product
 without knowing about the quality of them.
However
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, nowadays via the
internet
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 a person can criticize any
product
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 or
service
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 that they do not
approved
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approve
 of.
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, others can refer those comments before buying a particular
product
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 or
service
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, which is a major benefit of the
internet
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. There are many online forums and discussion pages available
in
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on
 the
internet
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 for
this
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 task. Another advantage of these online
customer
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 communities
are
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is
 it forces the companies to improve their products. In earlier times opinion of a particular
customer
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 is insignificant for
the large
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larger
 companies.
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,
this
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 new trend has open new methods to put consumer dissatisfaction of a certain good or a
service
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 out
on
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to
 the public.
On the other hand
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, the online facilities are
been
the state or fact of existing
being
 misused by some group of people who what to demote their competitors. Normally these people build
rumors
gossip (usually a mixture of truth and untruth) passed around by word of mouth
rumours
 about a particular
product
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 or a
service
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. Due to the influence of social media these
rumors
gossip (usually a mixture of truth and untruth) passed around by word of mouth
rumours
 spread rapidly by destroying the reputation of that company. Evidently, there are negative side
to
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of
 the
internet
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 based
customer
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 communities. To recapitulate,
although
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, sharing views and opinion on products and services have some
drawbacks specially
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drawbacks, especially
drawbacks especially
 for the producers of them, end users of these things get a number of advantages via those chat forums and even trough social media. Because of
this
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, now
customer
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 opinion is greatly valued by the multinational companies.
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