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Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is believed in certain companies that employees should care more about how they dress to work, while other companies appreciate the
quality
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 of work an employee has to offer. In my opinion, our appearances matter depending on the job acquired,
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, is more important than a
company
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 focuses on delivering great services. Appearances are usually considered in jobs that require employees to interact constantly with clients,
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, marketing, human resources or trade. The reason
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 is important is that outfits work as an expression of personality, and allows employees to have a sense of empowerment. Some employees believe that wearing a suit is like an armour that makes them invincible.
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, looking presentable gives clients the illusion that an employee is organized and responsible.
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, a good
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 service helps a
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 grow. When appearances
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 into consideration, customers see an employee as a human being, not as a service.
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 creates a sense of comfort, which helps companies develop better and stronger relationships with their clients.
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, customers are more willing to remain loyal to one
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. From my experience, I believe both are important. When I had dressed appropriately for an occasion,
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, a meeting, I have noticed that my colleagues tend to focus more on what I am trying to communicate.
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 means that people might be taken more seriously depending on what they are wearing.
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,
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 should always be of significant importance, because at the end of the day a
company
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 is selling a product or service, not a style. In conclusion, companies should strive for a balance between appearances and
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, but the latter should be emphasized more in the future development of a
company
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.
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