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Social media is becoming increasingly popular amongst all age groups. However, sharing personal information on social media websites does have risks.

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One of the most controversial issues today relates to the popularity of social media among different ages. It is argued that it has risks about users' private data. In
this
 essay, I am going to examine the question from both points of view. On one side of the argument, there are people who argued that the benefits of social websites considerably outweigh its disadvantages. The main reason for believing
that is
 easy access to the information, which will lead to new knowledge. It is
also
 possible to say that social platforms
such
 as Facebook and Instagram will increase the number of new acquaintances.
one
Suggestion
One
 good illustration of
this
 is many families, which met their couple on the web.
On the other hand
, it is
also
 possible to make the opposite case.
it
Suggestion
It
 is often claimed that in fact, private information is not secure. People often have
this
 opinion because on the
internet you
Accept comma addition
internet, you
 are sharing
your date birth
Suggestion
your birth date
, country of origin, your hobbies which is a great tool for hackers. A
second
 point is that a thief could use our posts in order to
still
take without the owner's consent
steal
 your personal belongings. A particularly good example here is when an individual writes that he is flying out of the country for the vacation, that could mean that nobody will be in his or her house, it will be not difficult access to his home. As we have seen, there are no easy answers to
this
 question. On balance,
however
, I tend to believe that increasing knowledge is more important than private data.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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