Some people believe that it is essential to include physical education classes in the curriculum for all school age children. Others think that children's time is better spent on more academic subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

Day by
the the
definite article
the
world become more and more
competative
involving competition or competitiveness
competitive
in every sector like schooling, career and innovation. Some people believe that physical
education
is as essential as
accademic subject
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an academic subject
academic subject
for every school age children.
This
writing
will illustrates
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will illustrate
the
importantnce
the quality of being important and worthy of note
importance
of
inclution
the state of being included
inclusion
of physical
education
and academic subjects in the curriculum for all the students. Physical
education
is something what makes a student for active healthy. The students who are doing physical activities like outdoor games will be able handle more stress. It reduces the obesity and keep a person healthy and relax. It has been noticed that, the people were engaged in physical
activites
any specific behavior
activities
they perform better than who were doing less physical
activies
any specific behavior
activities
.
On the other hand
, some people believe that schools should focus only curricular study. They think that, if you any student engage more
on
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in
study they
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the study, they
the study they
will get good
score which
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score, which
will help him to get admission
in renouned
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into a renowned
in renowned
into renowned
into renouned
university.
Consiquently he
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Consequently, he
Consequently he
will get good result in university exam and will have
better chance
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a better chance
to get
good career
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a good career
. In
conculation
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
conciliation
, considering
boht
two things or people together
both
view points I strongly believe that even if learning subjects are
essential but
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essential, but
also
beside
this
physical
education
is
also
more important which will keep a
personly
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person
personally
healthy and energetic.

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