When new towns are planned, it is important to build more public parks or sports facilities than shopping centers for people to spent their free time. To what extend do you agree or disagree.

While planning new towns, taking care of facilities for the people is very important. Some people believe that there should be more public gardens and sport grounds as compare to shopping complexes.
However
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I
am partially agree
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partially agree
have partially agreed
with
this
statement.
To begin
with
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,
shopping malls are important to introduce while planning new towns.
Firstly
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shopping is the favourite activity for many people and in their leisure
time
, they want to spend their
time
in shopping complexes.
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should be keep
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should keep
should be kept
in mind while planning new towns.
Moreover
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to buy the grocery or other products people need to go to shopping complexes and if the shopping Centres are built in towns, people do not need to go to big cities.
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Thus
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,
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,
it will save people's
time
. Probing
further
,
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,
other facilities
such
as
public garden
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a public garden
public gardens
and sport centre is
also
essential to be built for the people while planning of
new town
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new towns
the new town
.
First
of all, parks enhance the beauty of a town. People who want to remain close to nature and to enjoy the walk, prefer to go to garden.
Similarly
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children and youngsters like to play and spend their leisure
time
in parks.
In addition
, it will beneficial for the environment
also
.
Further
, Grounds should be built in order to make it possible for the people to play outside and
this
will result
into
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in
improvement in their
heath
a healthy state of wellbeing free from disease
health
. In conclusion
,
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,
government should provide all necessary facilities while building new
towns so
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towns, so
that people can enjoy their leisure
time
, pursue their hobbies and do shopping easily.

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