Nowadays, internet and television have given ordinary people a chance to become famous. Is this a positive or negative development?

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The recent development of the telecommunication field, especially

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the internet and television has provided a fair chance to ordinary individuals who want to become popular. There are certain benefits and drawbacks of

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development which will be discussed in

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essay before coming to the conclusion.

To begin

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with, currently there are thousands of mobile apps, websites and numerous reality shows that promote

skills

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the skills

of the general public. Looking at the advantages they provide,

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and foremost,

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gives the people a chance to expose their creativity and

talent

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talents

to the world.

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was not possible in the

last

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decade, now

every one

all people

everyone

can be famous if they are

competence

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competent

enough.

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, previously a poor person could not afford to enter the music industry because of expensive recording charges.

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, in recent years, the reality TV shows and the websites

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Youtube

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YouTube

has revolutionized by offering opportunities to armatures to share their talent online. Not only for music, dancing, acting, magic and by anything one preferred to do.

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, there is an

another

not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied

other

side to

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particular trend. If we take a look at the effect of

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on the children, some teenagers share their personal content on these websites and mobile communities leading to dangerous consequences in their future. Because there are certain category of people who misuse

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this platforms

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these platforms

this platform

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, when the children and even the adults reveal them self via the internet they become

potential target

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a potential target

potential targets

for those offenders.

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, most pupils get addicted to these networks and start to dream only about becoming famous via these

method

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methods

. Eventually, they

loose

fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense

lose

the interest in education.

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, ending up without a proper education and occupation. To recapitulate, by

analyzing

consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning

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both aspect of

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new development, evidently,

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has more negative side to it than benefits. Because, most people become potential targets to con artists and

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, youngsters

tends

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tend

to forget about their future education due to

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Submitted by n.madubashana on Mon Sep 16 2019

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Nowadays, internet and television have given ordinary people a chance to become famous. Is this a positive or negative development?

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