Nowadays, experience is more valued in the workplace than knowledge in many countries. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

It is often argued that an employee with an
experience
is more valued than
knowledgable employee
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a knowledgeable employee
knowledgeable employee
knowledgeable employees
in many countries. While there are some advantages, there are many disadvantages. In my opinion, knowledge is much
more better
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better
than
experience
.
In
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On
the one hand, If companies continued asking for
experience
, that would make people less interested to study more.
In other words
, people
would not be encourage
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would not be encouraged
would not encourage
to gain more knowledge and that may lead to a lack of
high
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highly
higher
educational
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educated
people. Because,
experience
is what companies ask for. Another thing is many graduate students will not find jobs easily and
that
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that's
because they
have not work
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have not worked
yet.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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