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Some people say that government should try to reduce air traffic by taxing it more heavily? Do you agree or disagree?

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It argued that the government should increase air
tax
 in order to reduce traffic in the sky.
This
 essay disagrees with
this
 statement because planes are more environment-friendlier
then
 other transport and high
tax
 will affect lower-class people. It is undoubtedly true that aircraft is more environment-friendlier than other vehicles. There are a variety of pollutions,
for instance
, traffic from buses, cars, and trains should be the primary concern. If the state will encourage us to pay more
tax
 for air trips,
then
 many of them will use ground transportation, which will lead to destroying the ecology of the earth. A recent study finds that 30% of carbon dioxide is produced by street vehicles. It is certainly true that, if the travel expenses for flights will not be cheap, it will affect the low-segment class. Because of that, people will lose their time for overseas visits which can take several days to get to the final destination.
Otherwise
, people with a low income will spend more on travelling, rather than buying important things which are more important for their well-being. Research shows that people selecting low-carriers
such
 as BlueJat and Pobeda in order to cut their expenses and to consume important things that can be useful in their lives. Taking all these points into consideration, making the
tax
 higher than now has financial drawbacks for poorer families and
also
this
 decision will be a reason for the dirty nature caused by non-ecological ground vehicles.
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