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Some people say that government should try to reduce air traffic by taxing it more heavily? Do you agree or disagree?

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Recently, a number of problems that are caused by the frequent flights have drawn public attention. Many conclude that the
government
 should increase
airline
 tax to reduce
air
 traffic. In my opinion,
this
 argument is nonsensical and the move it suggests can not be operated. I believe one of the main
reason
Suggestion
reasons
 is that the increase of
airline
 tax will severely harm international travelling. As the world embraces globalization, many people enjoy travelling to other countries and many among them are travelling by planes.
Therefore
, taxing
airline
 heavily will largely reduce the number of international
traveller
Suggestion
travellers
, as well as lead to the collapse of the international tourism industry. A recent survey shows in that in China, over forty percent people are unsure or will cancel their plan of long distance travel if the rate of plane ticket goes up at even a small extent.
Second reason
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The second reason
 is that reducing
air
 traffic will not tackle all the problems. Many serious problems,
such
 as the
air
 pollution and the large amount of money
spending
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spent
 on airport construction have nothing to with
air
 traffic. The
government
 should carefully choose the location for
airport
Suggestion
the airport
 and make comprehensive plans and budgets about the airport to solve those problems.
Finally
, sometimes strengthening
government
 control is
counter-productive
tending to hinder the achievement of a goal
counterproductive
. It is well known that the advance of free markets is that the price are
setted
put into a certain place or abstract location
set
seated
sorted
 by the interchange of supply and demand. Many economists argue that too many directions from the
government
 are not beneficial to the economic development. In conclusion,
airline
 taxing will not tackle all the problems and can even regarded as a bad decision. The
government
 should actively find alternatives so that we can avoid the demerits of plane while enjoy the benefits of it.
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